I'm short on reflection, but I don't know where or how to put that in for this essay. Also, I would like to split up the third paragraph, so if you find a good place to split it, please tell me.
Considering the amount of time I've had my laptop and how much I've used it over the past three years, I can't bring myself to write a love letter to it. There are some good reasons why I would, but other reasons why I wouldn't.
It's not a piece of junk, not by a long shot. It has a dedicated graphics unit, which is better than most laptops, and an ok CPU. Also, the backlit keyboard is nice. It doesn't weigh as much as some other laptops I’ve looked at much, which is convenient for lugging it around all day, and best of all, it's not a touchscreen. If it was, people would troll me endlessly.
On to things it is not. There are much better laptop processors in existence, same with GPUs. The screen only looks good within a few degrees of directly in front of it and has been scratched up by the keyboard. The hinge is roughly a quarter broken, and I think the battery life is degrading. I'm starting to see some problems with storage, but that’s just because I have over 400GB of games installed with a total storage of 690GB. Both USB2.0 slots are loose, the speakers are broken to the point where I just unplugged them. It didn't come with a drive cage, so the second hard drive occasionally shakes loose. I'm missing five of the ten screws from the case, with more likely to come. Speaking of which, the bottom case is cracked in a few places from all the times I've had to take it off to plug my hard drive back in. Because it didn’t come with a drive cage. It’s also not the laptop that I had originally wanted. I had wanted an MSI laptop with similar specifications, but my parents didn't want to get it for me, citing price and weight reasons. (Besides, that model got some serious upgrades when the Nvidia 10 series came out, so if I had gotten my way, I'd just have been disappointed a year later) My dad wanted to get me a Toshiba laptop, but I would not stand for that. The storage was less than I wanted, and while there was an option for a dedicated graphics unit, it wasn't a very good one. Also, it was a Toshiba. Not exactly the coolest of computer brands, and I wanted a cool computer.
Yet for all that, my computer has been mostly reliable. It allows me to get all my schoolwork done, and then immediately I can switch to enjoying a game of some sort without having to change computers. I do like having that ability in a computer. I'm glad that I stood my ground and got a computer with the specifications I wanted. It's been nice to have a fully solid-state storage setup on a machine that can run most games. Load times are nice and fast. Still, I don't think I'd write a love letter to my current computer. Also, the AC adapter stopped working while I was writing this.
But considering that this one is deteriorating (see the missing screws, dents, and other damage, broken AC adapter!), I should be able to make a reasonable case to my parents for getting a better computer for next year. Definitely for college.
Nice essay. To respond to your question about where to split the third paragraph, I would start a new paragraph at the sentence "It's also not the laptop that I had...", as from there on, its quite different from the other half of the paragraph, which is largely listing the problems you have with your laptop. With reflection, you could take about the trouble the problems you listed caused after the fourth paragraph.
ReplyDeleteI liked this write-up a lot, the frequency of humour was perfect in my opinion, had me engaged throughout. I looked at the third paragraph and I agree with Will and think "It's also not the laptop that I.." would start a fourth paragraph well. More reflection would be possible as well, maybe expand more on your phrase in the beginning, "I can't bring myself to write a love letter to it. There are some good reasons why I would, but other reasons why I wouldn't."
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